Okay, so I was thinking of writing a story just out of boredom, so you'll see some 'familiar' names in here, 'cause they are my friends.
"Look, Ethan, I understand you're trying to help, but don't. I have this in the bag." Charles said as he stood up, wiped the blood off his mouth, and stepped into a front stance, preparing to fight again. "Oh so you want some more do you, Shorty?" Said Darren Masters with a grin. "I'll wipe that arrogant grin off your face shortly, bas.tard." Charles replied as he cracked his neck. "In your dreams!" Darren shouted as he charged at Charles who then jumped up and front kicked Darren in the face, knocking the boy who cleared 6' to the ground. For 10 seconds, Charles, Ethan, Peter, and AJ stared at the boy who lay still on the ground. "... Oh no..." Charles sighed as he checked the boy's pulse, suddenly becoming wide-eyed. "H-He's dead!" Charles said, trying to be calm. Charles had never killed anyone before, but soon, his fear dissolved. Charles stood up, calm and still. "Wha-What do you mean, 'dead'?" Ethan said, shocked. "Dead, he's dead, Ethan, I took his life... Peter, help me hide the body?" Charles asked, an emotionless look on his face. "Yeah." Peter said as he helped Charles hide the body in the dark alley next to them in the parking lot. "Then afterwords we can go to Hooters!" Charles joked, diffusing the situation. "CHARLES! You killed the guy and you're not scared?!" Ethan asked, shocked and scared. "Hell no I ain't scared. Why would I be? Even if the cops find out, they'll never know it was me." Charles said calmly, obviously feeling no remorse whatsoever. "Now, pretend you never saw this, Ethan, or else..."
"But Charles I ca-"
"No 'buts', Ethan! Go home now! And tell NO ONE." Charles commanded.
"AJ, let's get out of here." AJ said. "Agreed." Charles replied as the trio ran back to the safe house that they hung out at.
Once at the safe house, Charles slumped into a chair with no emotion on his face, however, his eyes said something else. Torrey was sitting at the table at the far right corner of the warehouse employee's lobby writing something in her notebook.
"He deserved it, Charles." Peter said calmly. "I know that, bro. I don't feel remorse, remember?" Charles replied. "Hey peoples!" Autumn shouted as she walked into the room. "Catnip, hey!" Charles said in reply. Everyone else just went to work, Torrey was writing, Peter was playing Black Ops(That was fast...) and AJ was messing around with some kind of object(No, not your di.ck, so don't think that..). "Hmph! ... Fox, what's wrong?" Autumn asked. "Nothing, just thinking." Charles replied. "You're lying, Fox, your eyes are saying you're worried." Autumn said worried, "what did you do?" Charles sat silently for a moment and then answered "I was missing you too much." "Awww! That's so sweet!" Autumn said, kissing Charles and then going into another room. "Phew. That was close." Charles thought.....
>End of Chapter<
...Okay so tell me what you think, if I need to change something or you don't like how I made you look in the story, please tell me, but be nice about it and be sure to tell me how your character would act then.
A New Story(Content Warning, rare use of language)
81 posts
April 20, 2011
April 21, 2011
YOU NEED ME IN THIS STORY!!!!!!
April 21, 2011
You're a cop, so you're not in it until they find out it's me...but here it goes...
Charles was sleeping across the room from Autumn, everyone else had their own room. "...Catnip... You awake?" Charles said sleepily. "... Guess not." Charles said after 3 seconds of silence. Charles got up, examining his own hands. "My hands... have that boy's blood on them. I killed him..." Charles said, Autumn secretly listening with wide eyes. "DAMN IT!" Charles yelled, punching a hole in the brick wall.
Meanwhile at the A.C.I.A, the Australian Central Intelligence Agency, Ben was sitting at his desk, making business calls, his Australian accent heavy and distinct. "Yeah, I've got this one!" Ben said, talking about the Sydney Butcher case. In Sydney there was a series of murders and the culprit was a butcher that also cannibalized his victims. "Ben, we've got another one, in Melbourne. A kid about 15 years old was found dead in an alley, his neck was snapped." Sam Tumminello, an Itallian male with a distinct dark black mustache and black hair, square cut glasses with blue trim, and brown eyes. "Oh really? Damn, was it the butcher?" Ben asked. "Maybe. I'm going to go to the crime scene, wanna join me?" Same asked. "Yeah, sure 'mate!" Ben said, grabbing his gun and coat.
Later at the crime scene, Ben and Sam were inspecting the body. "It's not the butcher, Sam." Ben stated. "How do you know?" Same inquired. "The Butcher cut his victims' Corroded Artery and then ate them. This kid's neck was snapped and he shows signs of a fight. Look! There's footprints!" Ben said pointing to footprints in a scramble in the grass. "Ben, I think this kid was fighting, look, I've seen this type of jumble. These kids were fighting with Kung-Fu." Sam said, taking pictures of the footprints for evidence. Somehow, Charles got a feeling he was caught, he suddenly felt worried but got rid of the emotion as he slept.
>END OF CHAPTER<
Charles was sleeping across the room from Autumn, everyone else had their own room. "...Catnip... You awake?" Charles said sleepily. "... Guess not." Charles said after 3 seconds of silence. Charles got up, examining his own hands. "My hands... have that boy's blood on them. I killed him..." Charles said, Autumn secretly listening with wide eyes. "DAMN IT!" Charles yelled, punching a hole in the brick wall.
Meanwhile at the A.C.I.A, the Australian Central Intelligence Agency, Ben was sitting at his desk, making business calls, his Australian accent heavy and distinct. "Yeah, I've got this one!" Ben said, talking about the Sydney Butcher case. In Sydney there was a series of murders and the culprit was a butcher that also cannibalized his victims. "Ben, we've got another one, in Melbourne. A kid about 15 years old was found dead in an alley, his neck was snapped." Sam Tumminello, an Itallian male with a distinct dark black mustache and black hair, square cut glasses with blue trim, and brown eyes. "Oh really? Damn, was it the butcher?" Ben asked. "Maybe. I'm going to go to the crime scene, wanna join me?" Same asked. "Yeah, sure 'mate!" Ben said, grabbing his gun and coat.
Later at the crime scene, Ben and Sam were inspecting the body. "It's not the butcher, Sam." Ben stated. "How do you know?" Same inquired. "The Butcher cut his victims' Corroded Artery and then ate them. This kid's neck was snapped and he shows signs of a fight. Look! There's footprints!" Ben said pointing to footprints in a scramble in the grass. "Ben, I think this kid was fighting, look, I've seen this type of jumble. These kids were fighting with Kung-Fu." Sam said, taking pictures of the footprints for evidence. Somehow, Charles got a feeling he was caught, he suddenly felt worried but got rid of the emotion as he slept.
>END OF CHAPTER<
April 21, 2011
The Butcher case is a reference to the song Mein Teil by Ramstein.
And that one time is about the only time you'll say 'mate' in the story, Ben, unless you say it more often.
And that one time is about the only time you'll say 'mate' in the story, Ben, unless you say it more often.
April 22, 2011
haha epic. and i could see myself playing black ops after i witnessed a murder
April 22, 2011
Hehehehehehehehehe........... I like my role......
April 22, 2011
Haha, i like it. i'm just curious what I'm writing. And, nice you brought sam in his.
April 22, 2011
.... Haha I know you would, Peter... It was either that or being alone with hookers, but then this forum would get deleted. Thanks, Ben! I thought you would, though I know there's no real Australian CIA. Torrey, I don't know what, maybe this story? Like in "The Outsiders" the whole story is Ponyboy writing his English paper.
April 22, 2011
In the 2nd week after the murder, Charles was pacing around the room. He knew the ACIA was on his trail by now, but he didn't give much thought to it. "Alright! Peter, I need you and AJ to come with me to set up cameras all over the place, the ACIA are gonna have our as.ses if we don't have an eye on them." Charles said calmly, in his black trench coat which hid 12 knives, 2 45 cal. pistols, one MP5K, and several cameras and other spy gadgets. (This one is short 'cause I need to think of something...)
April 23, 2011
Ahh, I like that idea
April 23, 2011
"Whoa whoa whoa, you're goin' a bit overboard, aren't you?" Torrey asked, annoyingly. "Hell no." AJ replied, following his brothers, Charles"Fox"Kays, the son of an ex-CIA agent, and Peter"The Pimp"Miranda, who's Puerto Rican father(Sorry if he's not...) owned a multimillion dollar casino in many spots around the world. "Come back safe, Fox..." Autumn said, worried. "Yeah... I will..." Charles said, walking out of the room.
Meanwhile at the ACIA HQ, Ben, Sam, and Ashton Mallory, were investigating the case of The Butcher, and the child's murder. "Damn, we can't find the bloody culprit without more evidence!" Ben said, tossing case files on Ashton's desk. "And how am I supposed to get said evidence? I'm a detective, not a miracle worker, Ben.." Ashton said pessimistically. "Hell, how can any one of us find evidence? The Butcher cannibalizes his victims." Sam said, entering the room. "Now quit harassing my girlfriend, Ben.."
"Fine! I'll do this myself!" Ben said, enraged at the lack of effort on his team.
Meanwhile at the ACIA HQ, Ben, Sam, and Ashton Mallory, were investigating the case of The Butcher, and the child's murder. "Damn, we can't find the bloody culprit without more evidence!" Ben said, tossing case files on Ashton's desk. "And how am I supposed to get said evidence? I'm a detective, not a miracle worker, Ben.." Ashton said pessimistically. "Hell, how can any one of us find evidence? The Butcher cannibalizes his victims." Sam said, entering the room. "Now quit harassing my girlfriend, Ben.."
"Fine! I'll do this myself!" Ben said, enraged at the lack of effort on his team.
April 23, 2011
I will have many weapons...
April 23, 2011
lmao i think if my dad as a multi million air i wouldnt be on this site
April 23, 2011
Shame.
April 23, 2011
I dunno, this site's pretty fun XD
April 24, 2011
Yep.
May 2, 2011
CHARLESSS write the next part.
May 3, 2011
Oh damn! Thanks, Torrey! I almost forgot!
As Ben walked down a dark alley in the middle of a rainstorm, he felt a deep paranoia, someone was following him. "Who's there..." Ben shouted calmly and suavely as he stood still. "You're worst nightmare!" Rang the voice of a teenage male in reply. Ben's eyes widened as he did a backflip, dodging a shotgun blast that would have torn him apart. "Damn it!" Shouted Fox, stepping out of the shadows with a SPAS-12. "Hehe, so, you're that one kid's murderer, Fox, is it?" Ben said with a grin. "Yeah, the one and only High Commander Fox of the Crusader Army!" Fox said, charging Ben with a kunai in his mouth and 6-pointed throwing stars in between each finger. "Almost a good attack, but you fail!" Ben said, quickly pulling out a Walther PPK and firing at Fox, who uses his throwing stars to cut the bullets in half, and cutting Ben barely in the leg and cheek. "DIE YOU AUSTRALIAN BASTARD!(How rude, Fox, you're Australian too!)" Fox said as he tried to kick Ben in the face the same way he did with the boy. Ben dodged the kick and Fox ran up the wall, to the building tops as Ben stood there. Fox got away and Ben walked slowly back to base, knowing who the culprit was, and what he looked like.
As Ben walked down a dark alley in the middle of a rainstorm, he felt a deep paranoia, someone was following him. "Who's there..." Ben shouted calmly and suavely as he stood still. "You're worst nightmare!" Rang the voice of a teenage male in reply. Ben's eyes widened as he did a backflip, dodging a shotgun blast that would have torn him apart. "Damn it!" Shouted Fox, stepping out of the shadows with a SPAS-12. "Hehe, so, you're that one kid's murderer, Fox, is it?" Ben said with a grin. "Yeah, the one and only High Commander Fox of the Crusader Army!" Fox said, charging Ben with a kunai in his mouth and 6-pointed throwing stars in between each finger. "Almost a good attack, but you fail!" Ben said, quickly pulling out a Walther PPK and firing at Fox, who uses his throwing stars to cut the bullets in half, and cutting Ben barely in the leg and cheek. "DIE YOU AUSTRALIAN BASTARD!(How rude, Fox, you're Australian too!)" Fox said as he tried to kick Ben in the face the same way he did with the boy. Ben dodged the kick and Fox ran up the wall, to the building tops as Ben stood there. Fox got away and Ben walked slowly back to base, knowing who the culprit was, and what he looked like.
May 3, 2011
Dun DUN DUNNNNNNNNNN!!!!!!!!!! XD
May 3, 2011
Yeah but little known to Ben, there was poison on those stars... I always do that, almost killed 6 people in Tennessee with the damned things... I'm surprised it didn't censor "bastard"
May 4, 2011
Damn, I never leave anywhere without leg and face armor. Ever. The poison will have no effect.
May 4, 2011
I know it will, Fox knows it will... He knows a lot about you... >:D
May 4, 2011
It will have no effect at all. Mwahahahaha!!!!!!
May 4, 2011
DOESN'T MATTER HE KNOWS YOUR WIIIIIIIIIIIIIFE!!!!
May 5, 2011
So? I care only for my self... I often work to secret agendas... Lots of hydra-headed plots I have up my sleeve...
May 5, 2011
and that is why I'm scared of you...
May 5, 2011
0.0
May 6, 2011
Mwahahahahahahahahahaha. I am something of an evil genius. Undercover. In the ACIA. Ha! Spying on spys...
May 6, 2011
You're all this and you still talk to a bunch of teens on a game site?
May 6, 2011
Hey, I'm a child at heart.
May 6, 2011
Ahhhhh, yes
May 7, 2011
But evil and mad also. And blessed with the dark arts and black magic.
May 7, 2011
Secretly I'm a shapeshifter
May 7, 2011
Comes under dark arts.
May 7, 2011
Yeah and secretly God sent me to Earth to decide if humanity is good =.= Another lie, please.
May 7, 2011
Pigs can fly.
May 7, 2011
YEAH!
May 8, 2011
Lol.
May 8, 2011
Well we do have Swine Flu, so technically that one isn't a lie...
May 8, 2011
LOL
May 9, 2011
I have a question for you charles, how long did it take you to get that? lol
May 9, 2011
A few seconds.
May 9, 2011
Same here.
May 9, 2011
Just checkin'.
May 9, 2011
Why?
May 9, 2011
Why?
May 9, 2011
Originally posted by I.I.C.D.M.M Carnage217 |FBG$|Why?Why?
May 9, 2011
Cause...
May 9, 2011
Originally posted by Charles"Fox"KaysWhy?Originally posted by I.I.C.D.M.M Carnage217 |FBG$|Why?Why?
May 9, 2011
Originally posted by I.I.C.D.M.M Carnage217 |FBG$|Why?Originally posted by Charles"Fox"KaysWhy?Originally posted by I.I.C.D.M.M Carnage217 |FBG$|Why?Why?
